Midday wakes angels.
Petals turn or wisdom burns.
Are we Meaningless?
A flower’s petal
A resemblance of beauty
Floating in the breeze.
Inside, it is but just a mere
Soul, trying to escape a field.
Are these good poems and which is ur favorite?
Good effort! This poem if doing really well up until "it is but just a mere", which in itself sounds pompous. Work on that last line and you've got a pretty good poem here.
Reply:thumbs up, u sound like my ex, he's pro writer who inspired me....keep at it
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